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As a side project I decided to go through the SBS corners and look at unimportant characters drawn by readers or Oda and use them to draw a single chapter.
I didn't give this chapter much thought, one idea came after the the other and all of a sudden it was written. 30 minutes max.
I did however, use tools such as G and Maru nibs. Scanned the pages and added tones in Photoshop. All in all I'd say the entire process took a little under a week.
If you like it, I might continue, if you think it's lame…
I agree.
http://bato.to/reader#5ba8d7046d7dc887
ONE PIECE SBS SPIN OFF - Written/Drawn by Snir
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I find it cool but is this the appropriate sub-section ?
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I find it cool but is this the appropriate sub-section ?
Thanks, what did you like about it?
and I'm not sure, if Mods need to move it, please do so
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Thanks, what did you like about it?
The concept, the drawings (they may be simple but they're not bad, kind of reminds me of ONE's original version of One-Punch Man), the pacing, the dialogues that are not hard to understand (unlike other amateur comics) thanks to the good organization of speech bubbles.
This first chapter sets the characters and the main plot, and that's exactly what it's supposed to do.
Also, I don't know if you've drawn this :!
But if you have, then good job.
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I'm so glad it reminded you of ONE's original OPM because that was going through my head as I was drawing. I kept thinking about keeping it simple but still decent (like you said). I also liked how Murata would draw simplistic looking characters but complex backgrounds, so I tried to do that too with the Godzilla page. I don't know how to draw backgrounds at all so I picked a random place on google maps and drew it.
About the pacing, dialogues and speech bubbles.. I don't mean to brag but I didn't give them ANY thought whatsoever, I'm glad they came out alright and people think highly of them.
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yeah, I think this belongs in the Art sub forum
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I like it! Its very nice
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This feels so Bobobo.
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Well that's very nice, if you keep going you may get better.
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I really like this so far. Gonna be looking forward to this.
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I like how the guy who is in running for shichibukai and yonkou the main character. Did you had any plans to give him weird imba powers or sth?
Good job, I enjoyed it greatly, keep it up.
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I looked through the SBS characters and he was the simplest to draw… so he earned the title of MC
No plans for powerups yet... I don't have much planned for ch2 really.. just some visuals but that's about it
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Good luck, Snir! I enjoyed this as well. It has some pretty funny moments like 'that's what heaven is, but they just don't want you to know it'. It's pretty well drawn, and it's a pretty entertaining story. I read it until the very end. Trust me, if I hadn't liked it, I wouldn't have continued reading it until the end.
So when you continue this story, will we receive updates here or only on Bato? I subscribed to this thread in order to receive future updates.
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Good luck, Snir! I enjoyed this as well. It has some pretty funny moments like 'that's what heaven is, but they just don't want you to know it'. It's pretty well drawn, and it's a pretty entertaining story. I read it until the very end. Trust me, if I hadn't liked it, I wouldn't have continued reading it until the end.
So when you continue this story, will we receive updates here or only on Bato? I subscribed to this thread in order to receive future updates.
That's a good point, it's nice to know people read it till the end. And also, that it is actually good enough for people not to drop.
Yes, I'll most likely make another post here with chapter 2. More and more people are looking forward to it, which I did not expect.
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Chapter 2 coming very soon! I'm going to aim for monday.
Here's a spoiler:
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Haha, pretty cool. Take your time in creating it. Don't rush things. I am really looking forward to this
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chapter 2 is up!
http://bato.to/reader#98def915b33b7783
Where is this heading? Nobody knows!
- changed the series name to ONE EIGHTY
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Darn! It has just 9 pages. It was pretty funny. However, I didn't understand the 'strain' part. Also, when 'crouton' (hahaha) was falling on them, the sound effect of the fall was Japanese. It would be cool if you could put a translation note somewhere there to make it understandable.
In any case, I loved it, and I am looking forward to read more. Great work, Snir!
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Also, the drawing was beautiful. I liked it. You know, if possible, I would like to download it and re-read it at my leisure on my Ipad when I am not using the internet.
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Darn! It has just 9 pages. It was pretty funny. However, I didn't understand the 'strain' part. Also, when 'crouton' (hahaha) was falling on them, the sound effect of the fall was Japanese. It would be cool if you could put a translation note somewhere there to make it understandable.
In any case, I loved it, and I am looking forward to read more. Great work, Snir!
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Also, the drawing was beautiful. I liked it. You know, if possible, I would like to download it and re-read it at my leisure on my Ipad when I am not using the internet.
Sorry it was shorter this time, I felt like that last page was a good one to stop at. Thanks for the feedback, it's great.
The 'strain' part was meant to be Tony the rabbit trying really hard to keep his head up.
The sound effect was DO DO DO DO, which is used in One Piece left right and centre so I didn't think it'd need a translation because most people know what it means. But I will translate everything from now on.I don't have a problem with people downloading it, just a few questions.
Are the pages a good size for you? I have the original pages and they are huge, but I chose these dimensions because they are similar to regular manga pages found online.
Also, where do you recommend I upload it to? My aim is 1 volume. So, around 200 pages/ 11 chapters. I think it'd be better if I finish the volume then upload it as a whole. There will probably be some fixes once the volume is released. Like Walt's shirt was left blank in the first chapter and also, the misspelling of 'clean', also in the first chapter.I'll see if I can create a page for this spin-off on mangatraders for now
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Sorry it was shorter this time, I felt like that last page was a good one to stop at. Thanks for the feedback, it's great.
Sorry for the late reply. I have just opened my account some minutes ago.
@Snir:The 'strain' part was meant to be Tony the rabbit trying really hard to keep his head up.
Thanks. It was pretty funny.
@Snir:The sound effect was DO DO DO DO, which is used in One Piece left right and centre so I didn't think it'd need a translation because most people know what it means.
I didn't know what it meant. Thanks.
@Snir:But I will translate everything from now on.
That's a good idea, especially when there are many people who do not know Japanese.
@Snir:I don't have a problem with people downloading it, just a few questions. Are the pages a good size for you? I have the original pages and they are huge, but I chose these dimensions because they are similar to regular manga pages found online. Also, where do you recommend I upload it to?
Don't worry about that. I have downloaded them from bato :) I am looking forward to chapter 3. I have gotten attached to the story.
Also, Crouton was inspired by this, right?
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I might make the first volume available for download when it's finished.
The crouton is from here
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I might make the first volume available for download when it's finished.
That would be cool.
@Snir:The crouton is from here
http://onepiece.wikia.com/wiki/SBS_Volume_72Now it's even more hilarious than it was before.
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If you draw the crouton, its a good idea to keep the cup. It will look epic.
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If you draw the crouton, its a good idea to keep the cup. It will look epic.
…I don't really understand what you mean by that
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What a good PS! Besides, scanning the pages and adding tones in Photoshop, I think you can add photoshop digital watermark as well to create something enjoyable. :-)
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…I don't really understand what you mean by that
I mean draw the cup of crouton in its original shape, which includes the super deformed cup in all its glory.
Basically: draw it exactly the same.