Let's give them a bit of development, shall we???
Mini-story: ENERU AND LIFE ON THE MOON
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wow, a strong bond is developing here. i like. =D
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Thought this would be a good idea with warp's drawing. It's nothing offensive.
DUN DUN DUN!
What horrible thing is peaking behind the house.
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Ral, what's going on in that last pic?
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I read that, Changso. I still don't see what's going in the last pic. Is that Bon Clay's hand?
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it's bon clay dancing at a 90 degree angle :laugh:
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heh. i didn't expect bonclay to get to shrub town THAT fast ^^;;
anyway, let me doodle up something…
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Ral, what's going on in that last pic?
Bon Clay arrives at Shrub Town which still looks like warp's drawing. While he's dancing around town, something is watching him from behind a house.
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bon-chan left the town before the shadowy figure could do anything to him. he's too fast.
remember, people. pride comes first!
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Heh, poor… everyone, I think? XD
Just wondering... is there specific "villain" here, or what?
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The villian can be!
….I got nothing...
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The main villain of this story is the greatest villain ever; Fate. That, or we can just have Eneru go all Darth Vader on his friends in the end.
Eneru, Boss Rabbit, and Vader all together. What individual roles will they play in getting back home?
Are we done with Bon Clay? Is he going to disappear for a while since we've finally gotten to the main plot of the story only to reappear near the end for some joke, like they do in almost every story? Or are we going to do something else with him?
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i plan on having only eneru, boss rabbit, and vader in here. bon-chan will have to be gotten rid of eventually since he's actually playing a role in the current one piece (he can't work two jobs, poor him).
my idea was to make the 3 of them go from places to places to find a way to get off the moon, only to realize in the end that they CAN'T and they'll have to be happy with making mochi with boss rabbit's subordinates on the moon.
but that's spoiling the end. so why don't we worry about for now?
1. how are we gonna get rid of bon-chan? my wacky head said to either grab a huge eraser and erase him out of the panels, or to have oda teleport him out because oda needs him. but this should not be done until after shrub town arc. (oooo we have arcs now)
2. what are they gonna find in shrub town? what awaits them? who is this shadowy figure? remember, we want to avoid seriousness and stick with complete humor every single time, but at the same time we want the story to keep going.
3. there should NOT be any shrubbery in shrub town. make up something so that they can't get shrubbery that easily.that's all the keypoints for now. go doodle. XD
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@e1n:
have oda teleport him out because oda needs him. but this should not be done until after shrub town arc.
Er… too soon? I can edit and put this after Shrub town arc...
Since Oda is God, His face shall never be drawn. Agree? ^^ -
…damn I had one too, where he warped because American Idol was on.
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you like to play god, don't you chang?
actually, i think we can get rid of bon chan now, unless anyone objects?
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nah..the okama can go…
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@e1n:
you like to play god, don't you chang?
You have no idea. I would resurrect dinosaurs if I could >=)
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So close, they were so close to way to get off the moon.
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ok, people. ON TO CHAPTER 2. let's begin the adventure of the three stooges.
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I actually made a way that Vader leaves but I'll save that for later. Expect a chapter up son by me.
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That was great e1n, you are truely a genious. But, if I recall correctly, Oda refferes to Akira Toriyama as "Toriyama Sensei".
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buu: ah, same thing, same thing. minor details. <_<
AM: let's keep the three together until the end. now we have three main characters to keep the story going, and in an adventure story, three is better than two. =D
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! Darth Vader will betray the two by slicing off Boss Rabbits head, then Luke would appear and kill Darth Vader. The Luke will tell Enel that he is his father
I'm kidding, just random randomness from my head. XD
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well lets move on
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Cool story, i wish I could draw better… But...who´s Richard Simmons? I saw "him" in a episode of "The simpsons" (well, a robo-Simmons) that started to dance until his butt blew up
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He was a exercise infomercial host I believe….Can't really remember much myself.
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For your enjoyment and convenience, I now present chapter 1 of Eneru on the Moon, now available for download! :biggrin:
I apologize if I misspelled your name or mixed up a few pages. Lemme know and I'll fix it, okay? The "Extras" part was for pages that didn't really fit in the story, but really needed to be included.
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Did e1n approve this? blinks
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eh, it's OUR collaboration, so it needs no approval. thanks lobstar, for zipping it.
if we ever get this story done, maybe we should have it redrawn neatly, add some more panels to make the storyline flow, and release it as a doujin made by "APforum members." =D
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that would be sweet
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For your enjoyment and convenience, I now present chapter 1 of Eneru on the Moon, now available for download! :biggrin:
I apologize if I misspelled your name or mixed up a few pages. Lemme know and I'll fix it, okay? The "Extras" part was for pages that didn't really fit in the story, but really needed to be included.
Nice, some parts still made me laugh after looking through it.
So, how long do you think this will last? If it ends a certain way, I thought of what I think is a good twist to end it with.
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I hope we can follow some sort of formula, you know, boss battles and stuff to advance the story XD The final result is of course, getting off the moon.
Hmm… how long? I think we're like 1/4 or 1/3 done w/ the story...
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1/4 done? no way! let's make this at least 8 chapters long! xD (set targets wayyyyy high).
anyway, i just talked to oda, and he might do some mini-story about eneru on the moon, so when we end this, let's end it with "oh well, we can't get off the moon so let's all live happily ever after here on the moon."
…. cross out the part where i said i talked to oda. i didn't. i swear.
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@e1n:
1/4 done? no way! let's make this at least 8 chapters long! xD (set targets wayyyyy high).
anyway, i just talked to oda, and he might do some mini-story about eneru on the moon, so when we end this, let's end it with "oh well, we can't get off the moon so let's all live happily ever after here on the moon."
…. cross out the part where i said i talked to oda. i didn't. i swear.
I was about to say In Lil' John voice "WHAT?!"
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That PAcman strip gets me everytime.
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ack, the link expired. i'm far too late! sobs
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ack, the link expired. i'm far too late! sobs
Fear not! The great CaptainAWB1 had reuploaded it for everyone! Pay me $1,000 then click here.
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little black men in shrub town… interesting. i'll see what i can come up with after i get back home sunday.
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What happened to the rabbit that was with eneru at the beginning?
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.> I thought I saw AWB's post volunteering to be the one that keeps track of extra characters…
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I am. I just deleted it because I had trouble editing the post. I don't know why.
I'll post that stuff as soon as I get track of everything. Might be a while; I'm so drowzy right now.
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hmm..story seems to have slowed down rather..
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Here's the stuff.
EXTRA CHARACTERS
SYMPATHETIC BUNNY: A bunny with much sympathy for others. After Moverdort was turned into a carrot, he went nuts, grew muscles, and tried to eat it. He also almost developed a relationship with Vader. He also may have been the bunny who towed away Eneru’s ship.
BON CLAY: An Okama who ate the mane-mane fruit. He has been flung back to Earth by Oda-sama to aide Miss Goldenweek in her own mini-story.
MOVERDOLT: An okama with ominous power. He knows how to escape from the moon. He was turned into a carrot by Boss Rabbit, who now carries him around.
PAC-MAN: Last seen having foreplay with Ms. Pac-Man.
MS PAC-MAN: Last seen having foreplay with Pac-Man.
MOON-BIRD: A species that exists on the moon. One was seen trying to take the ring thing that was on Eneru’s back.
MOON-PANDA: Unknown if it is a species or just a single panda. After getting beaten by Moverdolt, he went super saiyan on his ass. Seems to have some kind of relationship with the Sympathetic Bunny. His current whereabouts are unknown.
MOON GOLEM: A creature with the knowledge of how to get off the moon. He was killed by moon whalers. It is unknown if he is one of a kind or a species. If there are others, Eneru might have an easier time getting back home.
TARKIN: Vader‘s lover. He cheated on poor Vader with an ewok. Current whereabouts are unknown.
MOONMEN: Are 99% rubber based, extremely aggressive, and boast ravenous appetites.
UNNAMED WOMAN: Appeared to stop Eneru from running away from the moonmen. Nothing else is known about her.
MOON YODA: Appeared in Bon Clay’s flashback. Taught him in the ways of becoming a Jedi Knight.
ODA-SENSAI: God himself. Whereabouts unknown.
???: Little black men who inhabit Shrub Town.MOON FACTS
- The wind freeze your facial expressions.
- At certain times, the moon shrinks down and disappears until it reforms at later times. Our heroes will have to move to the backside of the moon or they will disappear with it.
- Moon mud gets hard as concrete in seconds.
- On the moon, eternal posts talk to you.
- Shrub town is the home of the potters. They can tell you how to get home. They taught this to Moverdolt.