My one piece story called New World!!
http://toodeep1212.deviantart.com/art/new-world-doujin-pg-1-113177953?submitted=1
I'll get better :wub:
My one piece story called New World!!
http://toodeep1212.deviantart.com/art/new-world-doujin-pg-1-113177953?submitted=1
I'll get better :wub:
i dont get it
I dont get it o_O?
I don't like it
Don't listen too him, some people are just mean.
as I say constructive critisism is always better than being a jerk
I would go back and re-draw these pages ( at least the first couple) now that you have drawn them you can use them as outlines and figure out what you want to accomplish a bit better, and make the first pages match the last ones ( with the out lines and the typed text to make it a bit easier to read)
But keep it up dude the only way to get better at anything is to keep doing it, so good luck.
Don't listen too him, some people are just mean.
as I say constructive critisism is always better than being a jerk
I would go back and re-draw these pages ( at least the first couple) now that you have drawn them you can use them as outlines and figure out what you want to accomplish a bit better, and make the first pages match the last ones ( with the out lines and the typed text to make it a bit easier to read)
But keep it up dude the only way to get better at anything is to keep doing it, so good luck.
Basically this is what I was looking for and would respond to. Yea I really should go back and redraw the first pages. Even though its still underdeveloped do you get the plot at all?
I either couldn't read a page, had no idea what was going on, or was too distracted by the constant change in artwork to be able to get anything out of this, sorry.
Basically this is what I was looking for and would respond to. Yea I really should go back and redraw the first pages. Even though its still underdeveloped do you get the plot at all?
The most that I had figured out was that the Strawhat crew had expanded, and because of something that happened Luffy's crew felt they had to get stronger, really work on flushing out that plot, making your art more consistant, and mapping out your thoughts before translating them to the page and you'll be golden
What I see is Aokiji appearing as an illusion/dream to luffy to tell him his crewmates were killed by yours truly, but Luffy doesn't believe him.
And that he's got really strong.
Perhaps you should write in capital letters - and is it supposed to be read from right to left?
EDIT: I can't find page 2.
Now I'm officially confused.
It's good, but if you redraw and add color, it will be better.
What I see is Aokiji appearing as an illusion/dream to luffy to tell him his crewmates were killed by yours truly, but Luffy doesn't believe him.
And that he's got really strong.
Perhaps you should write in capital letters - and is it supposed to be read from right to left?
EDIT: I can't find page 2.
Now I'm officially confused.
Lol I hope you find it.
Well if it isn't my good friend TOODEEP from deviantart
It seems our paths cross once more
Found it.
lol @ Usopp's 6-pack.
Well if it isn't my good friend TOODEEP from deviantart
It seems our paths cross once more
Plz dont be the fellow sogeking lover/racist.
Who are you dragon, blue angel?
Plz dont be the fellow sogeking lover/racist.
Who are you dragon, blue angel?
It's me alright
Gonna make a few black jokes
Noooooooooooooooooooo
Why did the black guy cross the road
! To get to the fried chicken
it'll be more understandable if u say u draw it with a mouse on paint
Im going to guess and say that your not a complete asshole and that we can be freinds(becuase ignoring you would be beyond difficult) and your black jokes are just you surpressing your childhood memories of whatever.
So lets not say the n word and be freinds:happy:
Hmm. You certainly improved from the first till the last page.
I suggest fixing the speech in the first pages. ^^ That'll make it easier for new readers to get in the story. Also it's good that you started to ink the pages. The clearer they are, the better.
Keep it up!
working on pg 8 now ^_^
Im going to guess and say that your not a complete asshole and that we can be freinds(becuase ignoring you would be beyond difficult) and your black jokes are just you surpressing your childhood memories of whatever.
So lets not say the n word and be freinds:happy:
when i was a kid, a black man pushed me down and stole my bike :cwy:
http://toodeep1212.deviantart.com/art/New-World-Doujin-pg-8-141081981
Pg out.
Im taking suggestions on a permanent font.
New page out tommorow:PPPPP
http://toodeep1212.deviantart.com/art/New-World-Doujin-pg-8-141081981
Pg out.
Im taking suggestions on a permanent font.
animeace
it's good
Taboo the doujin is starting over again. Its a collab this time, ill send a copy to your inbox.
Your styles improved a lot, it looks totally awesome :>