Ok i am going to school for video game designer and i got a story(of sorts) and i want your thoughts on it
Oi I need some help ya'
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well, it may help to actually POST the story first.
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yeah i know but i am in class now i will do it sometime soon
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LOL
So, what's the genre of your game?
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Then shouldn't you wait untill you're free to write the story..?
The thread's going down if you don't post anytime soon.
Or it can stay up by idiots like me who keep posting about it. -
Well i had a 5 hour plane flight and not internet so here is my story so far.
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One Sunny day one a Beach there is a man lying there under one palm tree,. the wind is blowing and he appears to be sleeping. Then Hear feels some strange force and he sees the clouds change.
????? : That’s not good
Voice Hey Brother!!
?????: Hmmm?
Voice: Brother!! Where are you? I know you’re here. Answer me damn it
????:(Maybe He Won’t see me)
Voice: Ah-ha I have found you idiot
????: I wasn’t hiding yawn What do you want Kamin?
Kamin: The same thing I always want. It’s Been a year since I have seen you. Lets fight Scias!
Scias: NO!! Besides how did find me?
Kamin: Are you stupid? I am your twin I know every time you come back. Hell actually every time your even remotely close unless I am in battle.
Scias: Well my answer still stands besides looks like you just got done fighting
Kamin: Come on what’s the matter? Does did lose your spine on the road too? I didn’t know you were a…..
Scias: “You were a” What?
Kamin: You were a Chicken
Scias Glares at him
Kamin: Oh or is it that you only fight for that wom…
Gunshot sound here
Kamin: whoa that was close, heh heh looks like I hit a nerve there
Scias: Look we are brothers and I respect you ability. But don’t push your luck.
Kamin: Ok ok, Sorry. But seriously I want to show you how much I improved
Scias: Sigh I know I am going to regret this. Did Ask “Him” can we do this?
Kamin: oh Yeah I asked as soon as I felt you.
Scias: This still seems like a bad idea. But ok runt lets see how good you have gotten with that blade.
Kamin: Lets see how good your Hand to hand and gun have gotten.
Scias: LETS GO!!!
Scene: Changes to somebody Running down the hall and bursting in to a room
Guy:Excuse me sir, we have a problem
Deep voice: I Know Tsu. The seal is being broken
Tsu: What Should we do?
Deep Voice: Get me Kamin in here now?
Tsu :Ummm…..
Deep Voice: What is it?
Guy: Kamin has gone missing.
Deep Voice: WHAT!!
Tsu: AHH I am sorry.
Deep Voice: Did you check his usual places?
Tsu: yes we did.
Deep voice: ARGH Why now?
Another man Runs up
Guy 2: Excuse me sir
Deep voice: What Now?
Guy 2: It has been reported there are to very high strength levels reported.
Deep Voice: Hold on I’ll check for myselfSilence
Guy 2: What is he doing?
Tsu : Be quite Baki. He is trying to find out who it is
Baki: How?
Tsu: Some ancient Dragon technique I suppose
Baki: WHAT?!
Deep Voice: FOOL SHUT THE HELL UP!!!
Baki: I’m sorry
Deep voice: Ok now I am going to try this again
Silence
Deep Voice: BINGO! Damn it when did he get back? No Matter but I sure as hell didn’t authorize them to do this. You 2 go fetch me my limo. Look like i found my two Young ones?
Tsu & Baki:Yes sir
Deep Voice: I hope those 2 will be prepared for this.
Scene changes back to the beach. which now looks like battlefield.
Scias: *breathing heavy *
Kamin:breathing Heavy
Scias: So you learned some new trick while I was gone. Ha ha
Kamin: So did you.
They both stand back up.
Kamin: But you still hold back, why don’t you show me you full power?
Scias: Because I’m not sure a stupid demon like you can take it? Well Half-demon at least. Ha ha
Kamin: You bastard. Lighting Blade!
Scias: Flame Shot
The blast cancel each other out
Scias: Fucking hell. I know he didn’t give us permission to go that far.
Kamin: whatever lets finish this
Scias: ok then be my guess
Deep Voice: You two stop this right now
Scias and Kamin: uh-oh
Scias: Long time no see Tetsumo
Tetsumo: Ah my oldest son how have you been? Have been having fun with your little brother?
Scias: you make it sound like didn’t know sbout this and that I was here old man
Tetsumo: Stares at him
Scias: you didn’t did you?
Tetsumo:Shakes head no
Scias: FOOL
Throws a rock at Kamin’s head, and it hits hard
Scias: God damn it. What have a told you about lying? Great this was my favorite spot when I was home too. You killed my tree.
Starts choking and shaking him
Scias: grow up damn it.
Tetsumo: Enough already. We have some important business to end too. We will discuss it in my limo
Scias: Fine I guess I have no choice come on idiot
Kamin: Yes