A long time ago, on an account I stopped using here on Arlong Park, I made a short story called "Graveyard". ( rarely ever used it, and stopped using it after several days. Long story behind that.) I decided to re-work the story, and make it long, way better, etc. Besides that, ending more content to the tale by fleshing it out, AKA continuing where it ended. I also plan on changing some names in the story as well. This will also give me a chance to use some new English words to broaden my knowledge on speaking the language.
So, to start off with, this is the original story: http://www.apforums.net/showthread.php?t=17590
Renee –-> Beox Talent (I took letters from the word kick-boxer to make this name. Also, the change is because that was my cousin's name, so I rather not have memories reminding me of my family. Plus, this name is better! o:)
–-> Age change = From 17 to 20.
Air –-> Wora (I took letters from the word arrow to make this name. Also, Wora won't be a boy like in the original, but as a female; which reflects on my gender.)
–-> Age change = From 17 to 24.
Wind –-> Airwind (I just combined the names of Air and Wind from the original story.)
Robert –-> Robert (No change.)
Bishop Wolf –-> Bishop Jackal (I switched the names of the bishop and the priest, as I feel like this will fit the character better.)
Priest Jackal –-> Priest Satan (I think this will fit the character better.)
Nun Mary –-> Nun Xmas (The name is from Christmas, and it fits the character and her attacks.)
- Mr. Talent (Beox's dad) - Mrs. Talent (Beox's mom)
Current Area: Windy Village
–-> Jackan Church
–-> Jackan Graveyard
–-> Air Woods
–-> Airwind's and Wora's Home/Shop
–-> Beox's and her Parents' House
Also, when I wrote this story back in 2008, was a few years when I stopped being a Catholic; and went to being an atheist at the time, but I kept it hidden for the most part. So, I think the story back then, was me rebelling against the religion. Now, I want to try different things, and writing is one of them. So, why not rewrite the one story I did so long ago, and improve on it; inside of pretending it never happened? (Something like that.) Anyways, hope everyone will enjoy this new version, and constructive criticism is welcome; as I do want improvement in my writing skills. The story will start in the next post, as this post will be reserved for character and place names, among other things.
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Chapter 1: Introduction
! In Windy Village, there lived a young girl and her uncle. The girl is 14 years old, and she has red, shiny like hair. Besides that, she is pretty tall for a kid her age, around 5 feet 4 inches. The color of her eyes are multi-colored, one eye is blue, and the other is green. She likes to wear different outfits, and her current one at the beginning of this story; is wearing a sky blue top, with a skort that is yellow like the sun in the sky.
! As for her uncle, his name is Airwind, which sounds like a very manly name, quite indeed. It fits his personality in a way. He is a tall man, around six feet tall. He is also 50 years old, but at the same time; he is pretty able-bodied as well. He eats a good and balanced diet, and he makes sure to teach his niece the same type of eating; so she can grown up to be a strong and healthy woman. He, compared to his niece, likes to wear similar outfits that look the same. So, his current outfit is a black top with a pair of brown trousers. He likes to carry an ax on his waist, which is small compared to regular-sized ones. Lastly, his hair color used to be a mix of brown and red; but due to his old age, there are streaks of white in there as well; besides that, his color of his eyes is brown.
! They lived near a forest that is called Air Woods. Honestly, that was how part of how Airwind's name came to be. His father decided it be cool to name his son after the woods they lived near by; though he felt like he did not want to make it that cliché, so he added a twist to his son's name; by adding wind to the name itself. Plus, the name had a theme to it as well, and made it feel like quite a manly name for his son, quite indeed.
! Anyway, Airwind's job was a simple, but sometimes a boring type of work. He basically sold lumber and made unique pots out of wood. Though he also created other things with the materials he uses like bowls and spoons. Of course, he used his lumber to make things for his own home.
! So, now our story starts in the kitchen of Airwind's and Wora's home.
! "Good morning Uncle Airwind!" said Wora with a bright smile across her face.
! "Good morning to you too Wora!" said Airwind returning the smile back to his niece.
! "How was your sleep last night?"
! "It was good, I had nice dreams once again. I dreamed of a flying unicorn who let me ride him, while he flew across the sky."
! "Oh, I see. That sounds like quite a fun dream, quite indeed! As for me, I don't remember what kinds of dreams I had last night. Funny thing though, I used to remember them when I was younger. I guess it might be because of my old age!" chuckled Airwind.
! "Naaaa, you are not old uncle! You gots no wrinkles!"
! "I guess you are right. I do take good care of my body, and hopefully you remember what I taught you about self-care while you get older; when I move on from this life. So enough of my rambling, here is your breakfast. Spinach and eggs!" Airwind said with a smile on his face.
! "Ah, cool. It is a tasty dish, but better when I put Parmesan on it!" So, with that in mind, Wora runs to the fridge and grabs the cheese to put on her breakfast. It looked quite yummy to her.
! "So, what are your plans for the day, my young niece?"
! "I am thinking of hanging out again with my friend Beox. She got this new card game that she wants to try out with me."
! Beox was the girl that lived a few blocks away from where Wora and Airwind lived at. She was a bit younger than Wora, but only four years. They did at one point go to the same school, but with the difference in age; Wora had to go to junior high. Though once Wora becomes a senior in high school, Beox will be a freshman by then, so they once again can go study at the same place like they did in the past. Speaking of school, it is currently closed for summer vacation.
! "Well, hope you have a good day at work Uncle!" Wora said while giving Airwind a great big hug.
! "I be off to play this new card game that Beox has in store for me! I wonder how it plays like." And with that, Wora left the house and went to Beox's home.